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Re: scholarship essays
Oh, I'm so glad those days are over...psh, I wish! I've written quite a few scholarship essays (still do actually!) and this is my humble offering: -Be concise. One word ...
Feb 13, 2008 -
Re: Holding Out For A Hero Part One
Damn, you guys are good. I go away to make coffee and come back to answers! Thanks again!
Feb 12, 2008 -
Re: The Shadow of Paradise (prologue)
Oh, I love newly awakened powers! I'm interested to see how it is that the woman didn't hear her. I've already got my thoughts but I reserve judgment until the ...
Feb 12, 2008 -
Re: Holding Out For A Hero Part One
Thanks much for the reviews and the advice guys! My biggest problem by far is adverb abuse, I like them too much for my own good. However, I'm now in ...
Feb 12, 2008 -
Re: Holding Out For A Hero Part One
Thank you! :D If you ever come across those awkward parts, do give me a heads up again!
Feb 12, 2008 -
Re: It Isn't All Princes and Happy Endings
This was great writing! Your grammar is excellent, a trait that is AlWAYS admirable. And the storyline was creative and interesting. I guess my only issue with this piece is ...
Feb 12, 2008 -
Re: Escape [Prologue...I think]
Man, when you decide to violate people's comfort zones, you do an excellent job! Incest, child abuse, AND parent abuse. This is great work; edgy and very well written. I ...
Feb 12, 2008 -
Re: Part 1 of Ch.1 "Boy behind the counter"
I do like this! It has a lot of potential and I'm interested in seeing what you do with it. A couple of quick suggestions. As the people have said ...
Feb 12, 2008 -
Re: Holding Out For A Hero Part One
This is my first attempt here at YWS so I'm not exactly sure of the protocol for posting. Hopefully this works out! Summary: She wears odd clothes. She doesn’t socialize ...
Feb 12, 2008 -
Re: Well, hi!
[pre]Hey there! I'm Ollie May, a nineteen year old sophomore at a small private college outside of Chicago. I like chocolate, snappy witticisms, and Monty Python. My favorite color is ...
Jan 22, 2008
